A surprised expression could be noted on Lindsay's face.
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Some of my friends were once writing a story together in a round-robin style. Another friend of mine asked if they could read it and the friend she was talking to said, "Sure but don't show it to Grunion Guy." After he sent it to her, she immediately showed it to me, Grunion Guy. It was not great. I bring it up because when a person in a story becomes surprised, the author best notes it the way Pynchon did and not the way my friends' did. Their version of this line would have been, "Surprise came across Lindsay's face." Reading that line in the diner with some friends sent us all into hysterical laughter, especially when my friend Upright, acting as the character Surprise, mimed it by pretending to jerk himself off and then throwing his ejaculate across the table and into my face while yelling, "Bleeeeah!"
No, no! Don't go! I'll have some serious intellectual criticism and insights into Against the Day in my next post! I'm sure of it!
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